The color seeped through the petals like drops of blood beneath a crisp white shirt. She smiled at the memory.
A shame, really. Their meeting was so perfect, so destined, that for half a breath she had believed it could be like a fairy tale. A charming prince. A happy ending.
Her damsel in distress act was flawless.
He had no suspicions, right up to the short, sharp stick amidst the crowd. The confusion of the dancers; her feigned shock and dismay.
She breathed in the aroma of the bouquet, closing her eyes and exhaling with a whispered moan.
“You buyin’ those? That’s your third bunch this week.”
The Friday Fictioneers is a group of writers who strive each week to tell a story in just 100 words. Using photo prompts by group founder, Madison Woods, the Fictioneers can be found on FaceBook, Twitter (@FridayFictioneers), or linked throughout the web via their individual blogs. Read more of today’s Flash here:
A Word About Critique
Lots of aspiring writers – or insecure writers of all levels – post rough drafts of their work and ask for feedback. (Sometimes they aren’t really “rough drafts”, but we keep up the fiction to save face.) Irish writer Gaius Coffey, remarks,
“Sometimes early drafts are uploaded with a request to “ignore the typos” and just say whether something works or is worth continuing with. The request is like a sculptor holding up a slab of chipped marble and asking if it will be a good statue… Critique is not about reassurance.
Sometimes early drafts are uploaded as a form of defence (sic) with the writer thinking the sting of criticism can be softened or written off with “well, it’s only a draft.” If so, self-defeat is not self-defence.
By uploading the best piece I can for critique, I maximise (sic) my benefit from the critique. I have
already corrected all the problems I can see, so anything that remains is news to me. I cannot hide behind the pretence (sic) that it is an early draft and I would’ve corrected it myself, because I clearly hadn’t.”
I think Mr. Coffey makes some excellent points here, and there’s a good case for just cracking on with your piece instead of clamoring for early validation. If you believe in it, the writing should come through and make it something others can see too…AFTER you’ve done the polishing!
- Craft – Give Me Your Best Shot, by Gaius Coffey
- Friday Flash Fiction – “Hot Water”
- Friday Flash Fiction – “Morning Glory”
- Friday Flash Fiction – “Missed Connections”
- Friday Flash Fiction – “My Cup Runneth Over”
- Friday Flash Fiction – “Demolition”